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A cup, neglected, catches poison drops,
as tears, unfaltering, fall in droves from heights
unknown. A cycle none will dare to stop,
as doom's always in mind— a looming fright.

Remorse of past memories breeds a death
by stasis. Froth congeals and spills beyond
the lip. It touches ground, miasmic breath
is loosed upon the world. It begs, "respond…"

Apathy lingers, handing due torment
its day, a motif worn to bone by time.
Yet, here it's back again collecting rent,
and spent it's, blown away on useless chimes.

A haz'ed path of chosen lethargy
will lead  towards a hollow effigy.
:iconslyfry:
Some practice with iambic pentameter. I acknowledge that I cheated.
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"Some practice with iambic pentameter. I acknowledge that I cheated."

So did Shakespeare. It was part of why he was far better than those who just followed the rules without exception. Being a genius also helped him a lot. :)
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Yes, but if I downright admit to cheating, I can give any accuser the middle finger without as much guilt. :)
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:D A fine advantage.
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~intricately-ordinary Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Meter. Sucks.

I love this! It's thoughtful, and the message is strong. I read it a few times through to fully get it. I love the second stanza the most.
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Thank you.
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